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Waiting for an Indication 5/5 
29th-May-2010 07:59 pm
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Brendon wakes up when his phone vibrates across the nightstand and clunks to the floor. Shane groans into Brendon's armpit and flails a little in his sleep.

Brendon yawns widely. "You're old," he tells the top of Shane's head, leaning over the bed to fumble for the phone on the floor. "I'm not jetlagged at--" he has to break off for another jaw-cracking yawn--"at all." He pulls the phone toward him with his fingertips until he can scoop it up and settle back in bed to read the new text from Sarah.

hows hawaii?

Prty, he sends back, looking out the window at the ocean and absently combing through Shane's hair with his fingers. Shn is old. Dsnt want 2 wk up.

He gets a reply a few seconds later. LOL Regan says blow him

He grins and rolls his eyes a little. Grls nite? Dors Day agn?

Hepburn and cosmos and only if u count Ry and Spence as girls

i do if there drnkng csmos

taking the 5th

Brendon laughs, and Shane pinches him. Brendon grabs the punishing fingers, and kisses them when Shane glares. Brendon holds up one finger, gesturing to his phone with his head. Shane sighs and puts his head back down with a soft bite to Brendon's ribs.

not foolin me, Brendon taps out, aware that he's losing interest in the conversation as Shane's knee inches over Brendon's thigh.

but theyre making out so not rly watching the movie

cosmos grlier thn Hpbrn, Brendon argues. Shane is mouthing at his ribcage. It's nice.

u r really critical 4 someone who promised his mom a pic of kissing his boyfriend under a waterfall

cosmos grlier thn wtrfll kss. george of the jngl did a wtrfll kiss nbdy mnlier

george and ursula never kiss under the falls george seduces her with puffy cheeks ttl FTL

Brendon considers this for a moment. He looks down at Shane and puffs out his cheeks like George of the Jungle. Shane raises an eyebrow at him and puffs his own cheeks back. Brendon smiles. they wnt bck n made the bb thr. trst me

smartass. go blow Shane hes wasting hawaii. luv u

u 2, Brendon sends, and sets the phone on the nightstand. Shane looks up at him, smiling sleepily.

Brendon slides down the bed to do as he's told.



Art and Music: Amazing Extras by Big Bang Creators ~*~ Final Notes ~*~ Return to Part One
18th-Jun-2010 10:37 am (UTC)
This was really great! The shift of perspectives through the chapters made for an interesting narrative, and I love how you got to see the goings-on through a lot of different eyes. The unfolding of the plot was done really well and kept me interested about how everyone factored into things.

The Jon and Shane chapters were awesome, and I love the backstory you had for the Brendon/Shane. The bit about the Disneyland Urie Seal of Approval made me wibble, and Jon's exasperation at being caught up while being clueless rang so true.

Anyway, before this gets really long-winded, I'll just end this with - this was really awesome, all the characters and the characterizations, the misunderstandings and how they got resolved. Just everything was excellent! Thank you for sharing ♥
20th-Jun-2010 06:09 am (UTC)
I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I appreciate your commenting. ^_^
18th-Jun-2010 11:37 am (UTC)
oh! his mom wants a picture of him and his boyfriend? i'm going to fall apart here. thankyouuuuu!

i'm so excited that you've finally posted after all this time. :D

20th-Jun-2010 06:09 am (UTC)

18th-Jun-2010 11:43 am (UTC)
So much of it is so painful, but you wrap it up in cuddles in the end. You teased us FOREVER with this. <3 I am so glad it's done! <333333333333333333
18th-Jun-2010 01:41 pm (UTC)
Sixteen months, Rachel. I AM NEVER DOING THAT AGAIN. *deep sigh of relief*
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20th-Jun-2010 06:10 am (UTC)
18th-Jun-2010 06:38 pm (UTC)
This was the story I hoped we would get out of BBB. I absolutely loved this! :D
20th-Jun-2010 06:10 am (UTC)
Thank you so much!
19th-Jun-2010 05:56 am (UTC)
I really liked how the different sets of relationships are juggled here, how vividly each person's situation is realized from their own point of view. Lovely!
20th-Jun-2010 06:10 am (UTC)
I'm so glad it came to life for you!
19th-Jun-2010 04:50 pm (UTC)
This was truly amazing. The amount of work and planning that must have gone into this, and the different points of view, and the details and the descriptions and everything ... I really had a great - and heartbreaking - time in the verse. I'll be back, that's for sure :)

Thank you for sharing!
20th-Jun-2010 06:11 am (UTC)
I'm so glad you liked it!
19th-Jun-2010 08:40 pm (UTC)
oh my god this was so great! i LOVE shane and regan in this, and that is no small feat. they're just this bubble of open communication and functionality outside the faily madness that is panic. the ethical slut! i fucking LOVE that book.

i love the different ways that jealousy is portrayed - keltie feeling jealous of anyone who sleeps with ryan, spencer only sometimes feeling jealous of people who sleep with ryan, shane never feeling jealous until it is clear he's been ousted for sarah, jon angry that no one will tell him what's going on... i love how complicated every character is. i love that spencer recognized ryan's markings on bden. i even love how much jon loves cassie (also no small feat).

this was an amazing read and i'm so excited it exists! i've been waiting for some functional polyamory around here. fantastic! ♥
20th-Jun-2010 06:12 am (UTC)
I'm so glad you liked the poly aspect; jealousy and the causes of it, polyamory and how jealousy plays into it, are something I've wanted to write about for a really long time, and I was so hoping to get it right. Thanks for commenting!
20th-Jun-2010 07:00 am (UTC)
Ryan and Spencer's relationship in this is so fascinating to me. How they started out and how they kept a truce for years but then they reach that point where it's all or nothing. and I loved how it affected everyone around them and how their history together lended so much more to the story.

Jon's chapter made me go 'oh, Jon Walker' because they kept leaving him out and from personal experience, that is really annoying. also, he and Cassie are awesomesauce and really adorable together.

and I love that you wrote from Shane's perspective, too. You wrote him really well.

oh, and I love Regan and Sarah. they're sassy and wise women.

man, there was so much more that I loved but it would take me forever to mention all of them.

20th-Jun-2010 04:41 pm (UTC)
Thank you so, SO much!
20th-Jun-2010 06:01 pm (UTC)
Lu, this was a fun read. I enjoy open poly stories so much. Thanks for letting me participate in this one over the last year.

My heart really broke for Shane, his storyline was particularly well done, for me.

I was glad that since you included Sarah in the story that you evolved her from the 'reputation' that was put on her at the start into a quality character that belonged with him.

♥ Congrats on finishing!
20th-Jun-2010 06:02 pm (UTC)
You have been absolutely instrumental in the writing of this story. I'm so glad it was worth it for you!
20th-Jun-2010 10:48 pm (UTC)
Oh, it was amazing. Sad and somehow just right
20th-Jun-2010 10:55 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
23rd-Jun-2010 03:18 am (UTC)
This was such a complex and wonderful read. I really loved how you made each character and pairing feel real - fragile and painful and so deeply human. Lovely work.
23rd-Jun-2010 04:53 am (UTC)
Thank you!
23rd-Jun-2010 04:22 pm (UTC)
Awww! You are the shmoopiest shmooperson to ever live. You may have to change your name. To Shmoo. I <♥> YOU ANYWAY.

It's good to finally get to read all of this together, to see how the hurt and guilt and projection all interlock into a love story with issues AND A HAPPY ENDING. You do this so well!

And you got the polyamory-friend-testing tone just right for the Reagan-Sarah dynamic. And Sarah wasn't a douceface! Nobody was an unrelieved villain, they were all just getting screwed up by the domino effect of Ryan's issues. (I always blame Ryan's issues ... maybe I have a Ryan issue. /o\)
23rd-Jun-2010 04:24 pm (UTC)
Ryan has A LOT OF ISSUES, okay.

I'm so glad you liked it, bb, you don't even know.
24th-Jun-2010 11:18 am (UTC)
This was really amazing and not at all what I expected. I was pleasantly surprised when I discovered the Ryan/Spencer dynamic was the core of the story. The Spencer/Shane bits were just the tasty, tasty frosting.

Mixing metaphors. Maybe I shouldn't have stayed up all night reading.
24th-Jun-2010 12:19 pm (UTC)
LOL! I'm sorry to have misled you; the next longfic will be proper OT3, promise! I'm glad you found the frosting tasty. ^_^
24th-Jun-2010 10:13 pm (UTC)
Ok, all done. :)

I had to flail my arms a little and grin it out. This was very very good, darling. And since I normally avoid Ryan/Spencer, that is something to be said indeed! You really are a terrific writer, and I wish you didn't have things like life and work and all those other trivial things getting in the way of writing moar.
25th-Jun-2010 04:00 am (UTC)
Thanks, luv! I wish so, too, often. ^_^
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